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Traveling to and from work has become more difficult for many people, to solve this situation, employers should encourage people to do their work at home. What&s your opinion and discuss the advantage and disadvantage of this suggestion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or . Write at least 250 words. (考题出现时间: G；G；G)
【类似考题】
Nowadays, people perform their everyday tasks, such as banking, shopping as well as business transactions, without the need of meeting other people face to face. What are the
target=_blank class=infotextkey> effects of the phenomenon on the individual and the society?
Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication
and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
More and more people work at home and study at home with the development of computer . Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Only employees can benefit from working at home, but not employers. Do you agree or disagree?
【其他资源】A阅读第3篇就考的是teleworking, 在家办公对经济，环境和社会的好处。
It is true that today traffic in cities throughout the world has become a major problem. This is obvious from the number of vehicles on our roads and the amount of pollution they cause. Probably the traffic problem is because of individuals traveling for working, learning or shopping purposes and this is obvious in the rush hours we
every day.
It is also true that, these days, such daily commuting[环球1]& is not always necessary because people can do these from home. We can see this in the choices in
gives us today. For instance, on-line work, distance learning and shopping[环球2]& are all available via[环球3]& the Internet.
However, even if everyone had access to the
and the opportunity to work from home, it would be unrealistic to think that everyone would want to. Even though the
for working on-line has made this alter a possibility, it would mean people would have less freedom of choice and less
contact in their lives. This would have a large impact on the society as a whole.[环球4]
So, in conclusion[环球5] , I think that while this practice[环球6]& couldreduce the traffic
in our cities, it is most unlikely to be an acceptable solution. About other solutions, perhaps we need to think more carefully aboutfacilitating
transport and limiting private cars in our city centers[环球7] . To develop
transport that is not road-based, such as sky trains or subwayswould probably be a more acceptable alter measure to reduce jams on our roads.
&[环球1]乘车上下班
&[环球2]这是作文的瑕疵，没有紧扣题目。题目只是谈论远程上班问题。
&[环球3]介词，意味&通过&
&[环球4]使用了虚拟语气
&[环球5]此处作插入语，&总之&
&[环球6]这种做法
&[环球7]此处使用了非谓语结构的&-ing式&，作介词about的宾语
【范文亮点】
1. 文章的开头紧扣主题，体现了作者对考题的理解十分透彻；
2. 中间两个段落的主题句与话题也是紧密联系的，而考生很难做到这一点，因为很多人被模板束缚。
3. 结论段回应了考题&What&s your opinion?&,这是对这种考题的完美回应。既然考题要求考生发表自己的意见，就不要光讨论别人的想法，当你认为别人的想法不现实的时候，就需要提出更好的办法。这才是符合题目要求的答题方法，而不是一味地&赞同&或者&反对&。
4. 习作完全没有国内考生惯用的模板痕迹。仔细比较之后发现习作破题关键处使用的句型基本都是剑桥官方范文常用的句型。
5. Grammatical Range and Accuracy& (优秀)
句子结构的变化和语法的精确度是很多同学应该的地方。每一段三句话，全文四段共12句话，短短的260词（含标点）却令人惊讶地展现了英语句型的各种变化。尤其是前四句，分别使用了：主从复合句（含名词性从句中的主语从句）、主从复合句（主句+形容词性从句即定语从句）、并列复合句（含形容词性从句即定语从句）、主从复合句（含名词性从句中的主语从句+ 副词性从句！）短短四句话，尽情使用了英语中几乎全部的句子结构和主从复合句中全部的从句类型！需要指出的是，习作句子长度均没有超过25个单词。
【点石成金】
选择是学员很纠结的地方，绝大部分考生总觉得自己的量不大，尤其是大词难词掌握的不够多，其实这正是的禁忌。很多考生认背单词就能提高成绩，因此这些人永远都在背诵单词，从来不练习，对于自己已经认识的更是不闻不问。而作文对的要求其实不是&量大&，而是&灵活使用&；不是一味使用&偏词难词&，而是在找不到更简单的词来表达某一个概念的时候才使用&uncommon words&。七分以上才要求使用一些&uncommon words&，八分以上才要求考生基本用对&uncommon words&，九分作文也允许出现少许用词造句错误和笔误。
请看这篇满分范文使用到的亮点：
traffic in cities
the number of vehicles on our roads
the amount of pollution they cause
traveling for working learning or shopping purposes
the rush hours
daily commuting
reduce the traffic
facilitating
transport and limiting private cars in our city centers
not road-based
sky trains or subways
reduce jams on our roads
其他相关话题（远程上班）：
teleworking
telecommuting
working at home
home working
【训练目标1】学会灵活使用英语和句子结构
&&&& Prefer the simple word to the
word.& 用词尽量从简
&&&& Make every word count. 不要说废话
&&&& Avoid jargon, clich&s and
words.& 避免使用专业术语、陈词滥调和外来词
【训练目标2】学会结合题目写开头和主题句 (get to the point and answer the question)
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2010年雅思考试(A+G)大作文机经
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　　101030 政府 Some people think that by paying taxes they have made enough contribution to their society, others think there are more responsibilities than paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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　　101204 科技 Traveling by air becomes cheaper. Discuss advantage and disadvantage of this development.
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The advantage and disadvantage of facebook?
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In recent days, the technology has been developed sharply, facebook is a successful society site has been established in short term but its result is not small with existing
of this site in all nations on the world. Some people think that facebook bring more disadvantage than its benefit whist others think with opposite trend. My essay will shed light two side of this problem.
Firstly, it is disdenable that facebook where people can post all events, emotions, memories on their wall
is seem as a diary of each person, specially in public of this diary. If anyone wants to make friends with you or wants to find some information about you, they can access easily via facebook. In addition, facebook is a effective communication between people and people, it make everyone closer only by a click and some messages. Everyone
uses this site is more popular and it seems as a path of each life. It as a kind of dug make users are addicted, if you can’t access facebook, you will feel uncomfortable or feel the life will become boring.
Secondly, the the opposite opinion is the reseacher shows that the disadvantage of facebook is not small in all society. Admittly, surfing facebook can waste of your time quickest way because you can read some articles or some status of your friends in book’s list. You can image that there are more than one thousand people in your list, so you can seat before your computer and read all day without bored feeling. Nowadays, in mordern world, with stressing earn money for survial or pressuring in the job, young people is busier with the duties in their work
causes they can’t access facebook too much as the student who has a lot of spare time. Specially in Viet Nam, when the education system is bad with the light program in university
as a result of good high pupils become
lazy colleage students with surfing internet too much. Young generation is the future of each nation and future of each country is going to
bad effect of this society site.
In conclusion, everthing has two side of it, if people can recognize this problem and do other way with calculate the benefits and drawbacks of facebook site, they will be a happy life with the regret.
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The advantage and disadvantage of facebook?
I look forward receiving the correction of my entry. Thank you so much !
In recent years, the technology has been developed sharply. Facebook is a successful society site has been established in short term but its result is not small with the presence of this site in all nations over the world. Some people think that facebook brings more disadvantages than its benefits whist others think in opposite way. My essay will shed light two sides of this problem.
Firstly, it is undeniable that facebook where people can post all events, emotions, memories on their wall is seem as a diary of each person, specially in publicizing this diary. If anyone wants to make friends with you or wants to find some information about you, they can access easily via facebook. In addition, facebook is an effective means of communication among people, it makes everyone closer only by a click and some messages. Everyone access this site more frequently and it seems as a path of each life. It is like a kind of dug making users addicted, if you can&t access facebook, you will feel uncomfortable or feel that the life will become boring.
Secondly, the the opposite opinion is the reseacher shows that the disadvantage of facebook is not small in all society. Admittedy, surfing facebook can waste your time in the quickest way because you can read some articles or some status of your friends in book&s list. You can image that there are more than one thousand people in your list, so you can seat before your computer and read all day without feeling bored. Nowadays, in mordern world, with stressful earning money for survial or pressure in the job, young people are busier with the duties in their work so they can&t access facebook as much as students who have a lot of spare time. Specially in Viet Nam, when the education system is bad with the light program in university as a result of good high pupils become lazy college students with surfing internet too much (I don't quite understand what you mean here??). Young generation who are the future of each nation and future of each country (don't repeat it) is going to be under bad effect of this society site.
In conclusion, everthing has two sides of it. If people can recognize this problem and do other way with calculate the benefits and drawbacks of facebook site, they will be a happy life with the regret. (what do you mean here??)
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Advantages and Disadvantage of Private Cars
With the rapid development of economy, a large number of people gradually own private cars. There is no doubt that private cars have been playing an important part in the daily life. As we all know, every coin has two sides. On one hand, cars have a lot of advantages . Firstly, cars can save time for people when they go out. Secondly, cars can help parents take their children to school. Moreover, owning a car is a fashion and represents the high quality of life.
On the other hand ,cars also have the disadvantages. It is obviously that a private car can only load from 5 to 8 pers, to be more precise, the private car we talk about limited to five passengers, the eight passenger type is what we called MPV (multi-purpose vehicle). To travel limited quantity of people we cumed significant high amount of resources in contrast to the Mass Transit system such as bus, train or underground railway. The frequent use of private car also occupies lot of space on the road and results in traffic jams. Accidents are proportional related to number of vehicles on the road and obviously private car owns a relatively high percentage of them.